First of all, great title, and loving both iced buns and Bangkok (not necessarily in that order) made me choose this book in particular to read.

I enjoyed the prologue as it did exactly what a prologue should do; it whetted my curiosity and made me want to read on. Who is this 24 year old dog-owning smoker who wants to watch an old lady eat a bun? ('She settles her old frame on the bench.' I'm assuming that means her old body? Or is it a younger person carrying some kind of old frame?) And who is the watcher? But most importantly, who exactly is Tom? I shall carry on reading and find out.

Chapter 1 and I'm catapulted into another world. I liked 'his body was a CV.' There is plenty of interest, plenty going on, but I still felt I hadn't got to know Tom any better. I'd perhaps like a little more description as well; there is plenty of opportunity for it.

Chapter 2, and I'm getting into the swing of it. I enjoyed the interchanges between the protag and Alexsei, and the characters came to life as there is more warmth and humour in the writing now.

In my humble, unprofessional opinion, I felt that the writing could be tightened up. There are punctuation mistakes (eg Polish, not polish,etc,) and the indenting is strange, but these are all easily fixed. Writing in the present tense is very difficult, and I think you have done well with it. The subject matter is very interesting and I hope we see more of Alexsei. This shows promise and I wish you well with it.