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Reviewed By Title Manuscript Reviewed Overall rating Review
folkhari Saffire story critique
2

Saffire story critique

The overall story was quite compelling. Saffire discovers a mystery and is keen to explore it, so we are pulled in quickly. Saffire herself is a realistic character, and it’s interesting seeing events unfold...

Vanda Inman Many of us Tristan's Adventures - In The Cave
4

Many of us love the adventure stories of our childhood such as Enid Blyton's Famous Five, although children today are no longer allowed such freedom.
These chapters bring the sense of adventure into the present day by making Tristan a...

Hayley Spurway First of all Tristan's Adventures - In The Cave
2

First of all let me admit that I don’t know enough about the genre of children’s books to make my review and opinions accurate. However, it would be good to know the age group at which your work is directed as this will surely make a difference...

Vanda Inman Having now read Tristan's Adventures - In The Cave
4

Having now read the revised Chapter One, I feel that this is much better than the original -the introduction of Megan really lifts it and changes the pace. It makes it more real as no doubt many small boys have older sisters and will be able to...

Marion Cox Having worked with Tristan's Adventures - In The Cave
4

Having worked with young children I was fascinated to read this story and can recognise a lot of youngsters I've encountered in the three children. The author has changed her style considerably in the rewritten first chapter and the whole feel of...

Vicky Twead I liked this Tristan's Adventures - In The Cave
3

I liked this very much. The sentences are clear and easy to read, and you vary the structure and lengths which helps the pace. You start off with plenty of action which is a good hook for young and old.

I liked Tristan, his character was...

Miles Taylor Not bad for Focus
4

Not bad for a first effort, but still needs a lot of work. There is the kernel of a good idea here - I like the concept of the Faustian pact - but the characters are not differentiated enough, and the writer needs to do more research to convince...

Christophe Philipps There are some Focus
3

There are some Ok ideas here, but so many typos - not very professional.
Jen Wight Here are my Iced Buns In Bangkok
3

Here are my thoughts, I hope they are useful.

The things I liked

Title – It’s funny, quirky and shows it is a travel type book. Do you end up in Thailand? If so, fantastic as the title starts and ends the book – if that makes sense...

Georgia Gail Loyd I'm not a Iced Buns In Bangkok
4

I'm not a pro, but you had me hooked. Sentence structure a little awkward once in a while but I care whether you lived through this adventure. A story worth telling.