Focus

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Details Author : Miles Taylor
Main Genre : TV comedy
Other Genres : Comedy
Overall :
3.5
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Main Genre: 
TV comedy
Other Genres: 
Comedy
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Summary: 

Desperate for attention, a small political party promise people anything for a share of power. And then they get it.

Description: 

The Focus Party is an obscure political party with six MEPs and 43 local councillors (a cross between the Lib Dems & UKIP).

Their leader and only MP dies, amid scandal (autoasphyxia), and a by-election ensues and leadership challenge ensues. A fairly new councillor in the constituency, Simon (ambitious but naive), an ex lower-league footballer is elected, against the odds, for the Focus Party and is immediately thrust into a leadership bid – ‘Simon is the unity candidate’.

Amid various attempts to gain popularity and power they make all sorts of outlandish offers to unscrupulous individuals in return for money and recognition. Against the odds, they win three seats in the next election - a hung parliament. The Focus party become the kingmakers, and have to start to deliver on some of their deals.

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Episode 3, Scenes 2 - 4
Average Rating
Overall:
3.5
Ideas:
4
Research:
3.5
Writing style:
4
Title and subtitle:
3.5
Plot and pace:
4
Characters:
3
Dialogue:
3.5
Professionalism:
2

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Manuscript: 
Focus
Review: 

There are some Ok ideas here, but so many typos - not very professional.

Rating
Overall rating: 
3
Ideas: 
3
Research: 
2
Writing style: 
4
Title and subtitle: 
4
Plot and pace: 
4
Characters: 
3
Dialogue: 
3
Professionalism: 
1
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Reviewed By : Christophe Philipps
Reviewed on : 26th Aug 2009
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Not bad for

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Manuscript: 
Focus
Review: 

Not bad for a first effort, but still needs a lot of work. There is the kernel of a good idea here - I like the concept of the Faustian pact - but the characters are not differentiated enough, and the writer needs to do more research to convince us he understands the workings of a political party, even a small one.

Rating
Overall rating: 
4
Ideas: 
5
Research: 
3
Writing style: 
4
Title and subtitle: 
3
Plot and pace: 
4
Characters: 
3
Dialogue: 
4
Professionalism: 
3
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Reviewed By : Miles Taylor
Reviewed on : 26th Aug 2009
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